Roumen defenders

[ccasarow]

Erm.. Hello.
I got bored with playing Fiesta, so I decided to take a break from it and write a story. I only just started it. Feel free to post some comments about it, they are greatly appreciated. Thx! ^^(PS it's midnight, and im abit drowsy, so I only wrote a little. Still, quantity isn't quality.)

Prologue

She only stopped gathering when she died. It was then they started to laugh.

The young adventurer who was hunting slimes in the forest was not sure what he had just heard. He turned suddenly, sensing possible danger, his eyes searching for a monster that was so obviously in pain. He had never known any monster that screamed in quite that way before. He edged towards the noise cautiously; the scream had now turned into a whimper, but it still did not sound like any monster he knew. He hoped it would be easy enough to kill. He wasn’t ready for Healer Julia’s ward for the third time this week.

The young boy moved stealthily towards the river, where the strange noise came from, running from tree to tree, feeling the protection of bark against his shoulder blades, something to touch. Never stay in the open, Skill Master Ruby had taught him. He had just reached the edge of the clearing when the whimpering stopped. Creeping slowly, he realized that the strange cry emanated from a girl, lying dead on the damp forest ground. Jumping around her were a few Hero Slimes, dancing around, gloating their victory.

Suddenly, one of the Hero Slimes spotted the archer among the ferns. His evil grin spread across its face at the thought of slaughtering another weakling. The archer fired arrow after arrow, but it was no use. Every arrow he fired, the slime seemed to to absorb the arrow into its gooey body. As the Hero Slime caught up with the now fleeing archer, it jumped up and pounced on him. And as the archer gasped his final breath, everything went dark…

[KatieElisa]

Intriguing beginning. Looking forward to hearing more of what happens. :)

[ras-blackfire]

oeh i like it so far :)

[bjzee1]

Suddenly, one of the Hero Slimes spotted the archer among the ferns. His evil grin spread across its face at the thought of slaughtering another weakling. The archer fired arrow after arrow, but it was no use. Every arrow he fired, the slime seemed to to absorb the arrow into its gooey body. As the Hero Slime caught up with the now fleeing archer, it jumped up and pounced on him. And as the archer gasped his final breath, everything went dark...

This paragraph is the best! :P i like the detail you put into it... keep writing and send me PMs when the next part comes out :D

[Daevor]

OMG the suspense! I can't take it anymore :eek:

I wish the girl could have been saved *sniff*.

I have 1 comment:


The young boy moved stealthily towards the river, where the strange noise came from, running from tree to tree, feeling the protection of bark against his shoulder blades, something to touch.


If he's running towards the source of the sound, he will likely not be facing away from it. Hence, he will not have his back to the tree, and thus his shoulder blades will not be making contact with a tree. Instead, more likely, one side of his chest will touch a tree, as he cautiously peers around it.

[Dragonfly77]

Very very nice story. ^^ You do put a good description in it. Can't wait to read more. ^^

[T3h_SyN]

*Intrigued* I like this story and it's just at the prologue :3

I'd love to see more, keep up this high standard you've set for yourself.

If he's running towards the source of the sound, he will likely not be facing away from it. Hence, he will not have his back to the tree, and thus his shoulder blades will not be making contact with a tree. Instead, more likely, one side of his chest will touch a tree, as he cautiously peers around it.

Or

He could run towards the tree, spin around and brace his back against it, peering around the tree by looking over either shoulder. Though your way of doing is more common a thing to do, judging by how cautious the archer is being this is more valid a stance for him to take because it's already prepped to run if he does see something dangerous.

[Daevor]

Kitone..? As in War of Kings Kitone? Hi!

I do still think it's unlikely the archer will have his back against a tree - if he's gone to investigate some odd and likely dangerous sounds, he'll not be turning his back to the source of potential danger until he has discovered what it is. Facing away from the source of the potential danger limits his ability to discern it's true nature.

Oh well. In the end, I guess it's all up to the author(ess).

[ccasarow]

OMG the suspense! I can't take it anymore :eek:

I wish the girl could have been saved *sniff*.

I have 1 comment:



If he's running towards the source of the sound, he will likely not be facing away from it. Hence, he will not have his back to the tree, and thus his shoulder blades will not be making contact with a tree. Instead, more likely, one side of his chest will touch a tree, as he cautiously peers around it.

Ah, I knew it wasn't clear. I had doubts about that sentance. I meant to describe that he WAS running towards the sound, but he crept close to trees to make him feel safe, something to touch.

[ccasarow]

Chap 1

Town Chief Roumenus banged his fist on the table. “God you people. Have you no common sense? It’s obvious we have enough inns to accommodate travelers. What we lack of though, is a marketplace. Merchants are fighting each other to set up shop, I don’t want innocent blood spilled. I expect to find a 1500 word report on my desk by noon tomorrow.” The two fighters glanced at each other, and hurried off without a word.

Roumenus sighed. As newly appointed town chief of Roumen, he knew he had to go to long lengths to get the town back in shape, but he didn’t imagine that even the people he had to work with were that ignorant. Suddenly, an apprentice cleric rushed into the room. “How many times did I say…”

“Town Chief, Healer Julia would like to see you. She says it’s a very urgent matter.”
Roumenus dropped the matter of the “Do Not Disturb” sign on his door and followed the cleric hastily to Healer Julia’s ward.


~*~*~*~*~*~


Roumenus stepped into Julia’s stuffy ward, he flinched at the smell of strange herbs and potions. At the back sat Julia and Skill Master Ruby. “Town Chief, so glad you came,” said Julia, standing up. “Jake, could you give us a moment?” The apprentice cleric turned red at the sound of his name, and stepped out of the room.

“Roumenus, let me cut to the chase,” Julia dropped her voice so no one else could listen in to what she was saying. “This afternoon, a gang of Hero Slimes attacked and killed an apprentice cleric and an apprentice archer. You and I both know that our apprentices are capable of killing Hero Slimes without doubt, but the Hero Slimes that killed these two, they were different, They have evolved, Roumenus; evolved into Hero Demon Slimes. They have a higher base damage, higher attack rate, and a critical rate that is off the charts. The wounds on this poor archer show that he couldn’t even put up a fight. One pounce, just one, and he was dead.”

“And what about the girl?” asked Roumenus, stiffening at the horrible bruises on her back.”
“They…” Julia choked as if she couldn’t force the words out of her mouth. Tears started to roll down her face.
‘They tortured her before they killed her, those unmerciful creatures.” Skill Master Ruby put in without showing any emotion, her expression blank. “They didn’t even let her heal herself.”
Roumenus was shocked, never before had he heard of a monster torturing its victims before they died. “Who could possibly do such a thing?”
“The only person who have control over slimes is King Slime himself, sir.” Ruby explained. “In order to stop him breeding there ‘demon slimes’, we must send an elite force to Cyclone Hill and destroy them.”

[Daevor]

OMG Hero Demon Slimes :eek:

The poor cleric and archer didn't stand a chance! *sniff*

[meepkeep333]

more more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! brings in the riot pepole

ok after we start a mob we bring in the exploisoins *brings out a bomb and some bottles fills up the bottle with gun powder and puts a fuse on them* so we light these and throw them at the author and force her to wright more.

[ccasarow]

haha..well i am busy with school stuff so might be a little while. *reinforces door with full plated steel*

[Dragonfly77]

Full plated steel...that's a good idea o.o Mind telling me where I can get some?

[ccasarow]

The president gave it to me =)

[ccasarow]

You could ask him if you want to. Just mention you know cas and he'll maybe give you 1 million dollars worth of SC too. ^^

[ccasarow]

Chap 2

“But who could possibly be strong enough to face these demons?” Roumenus shivered at the thought of hundreds of Isyan citizens murdered without mercy in a blink of an eye.
“I have organized a PVP event for all apprentices, the strongest and most skillful ones will be chosen to face Cyclone Hill,” said Ruby.
Roumenus chuckled. “You are serious, right?” Roumenus exclaimed, falling off his chair, “you want to send apprentices to destroy these things?”
“Our warriors need to stay back and defend Roumen if we are faced with attack.”
“Surely we can spare some?”
“I’m afraid not, young apprentices these days, arrogant to the last. They couldn’t even kill a crab even if they wanted to.”
“So be it. I shall watch this event with interest.”
~*~*~*~*~

Morning light seeped through a small gap in the blinds, like a monster ready to pounce on its prey, enlightening the dark room with every step it took. Rose was already awake, listening to the shouts and cries of a typical Roumen morning. Merchants were shouting at each other, fighting over a good location; parties of apprentices were eager to set off to untamed lands for a day of adventure; and farmers ready to gather various herbs and spices. Oh no! She thought to herself. I promised Healer Julia to gather some herbs for her in Forest of Tides. Rose hurriedly dressed, snatched her mace from the musky wooden floor and set off.
~*~*~*~*~
Rose stopped outside the gate to Forest of Tides, showing no sign of life as she stared at the sign that had been put up: Attention all Isyan citizens, under the authorization of Town Chief Roumenus, Forest of Tides has been closed to all citizens until further notice.
“Heh, that’s a noob place anyway,” gruffed a much older apprentice fighter.
“Who you calling..” Rose challenged in her high squecky voice. She paused to control it. “Who you calling a noob?”
“You, with that dusty old mace and torn armour,” the fighter said, while stroking his godly +9 zk axe.
“I can beat you in a fight anytime!” shouted Rose, trying to sound brave, but she knew she was only bluffing. She was actually laughing at herself, thinking how she could possibly defeat a strong fighter. In manners I s’pose, she chuckled to herself.
“I hear there’s a PVP event for all apprentices under lvl 40. I’ll be there, of course,” he boasted proudly.” Maybe you wanna come, I could spare you mercifully, little girl.”
Feed her flies, spank her if you wanted to, Rose didn’t care, but she loathed anyone who called her LITTLE. “Oh I’ll be there, and I’ll be the one who kills you.” She barked, and scrolled to Roumen. She didn’t know why she did that, she was already in Roumen, but she just did not want to see that fighter.
Ah well, she thought to herself. Hard work ftw.

[Dragonfly77]

anyone who strokes a +9 axe like a pet is a noob. You won't have any problem. ~.~

[meepkeep333]

that steel wont stop the riot

*pulls out a nucelaur bomb*

so if we cant break the steel open we will just blow up the rest of the pleace instead.

[ccasarow]

doh crap... *gets on private jet to a distant tropical island* haha, suck!
*strokes +9 mace like a pet* (hehe) (but i aint a noob >.<)

[Daevor]

Ohhh, a PvP competition. Clerics, ftw!!!

[meepkeep333]

*gets in a plane to chase the author puts the nuculer bomb in the plane ready to drop*

[ccasarow]

*ejects from plane, gets in submarine and reaches underwater home*

[ccasarow]

-bump-
-bumpity bump-

[meepkeep333]

*funds un derwater home and brings bomb with him*

finds not funds

[ccasarow]

ah, i surrender. I'll have the next chapter in 120 hours (xD)

[meepkeep333]

ok its ben 24 hours wheres that chapter?

[meepkeep333]

ok its ben long enough wheres that chapter

[ccasarow]

Chap 2

15 apprentices were greeted with a huge shock when they arrived the the PVP arena. Flames frolicked and danced around the crumbling pillars, motioning to the apprentices to come closer.
“Look out!” shouted a fighter as the west wall of the arena started to fall. The arrogant fighter Rose met earlier did not here the cry, as he was listening to his iPot (yes, even Isya is more developed than the real world).
Now at this moment, Rose was glaring at the fighter whose life was at risk. Being a kind and forgiving person, she quickly casted Invincible on him. As the ancient stone battered on the surprised fighter, he shot a sorry look of gratitude at her. “Thank you for saving me. I’m sorry about the way I acted last time we met. So…erm…no hard feelings, right?” he said as he walked over the Rose.
“Nah, we’re cool.”
“Great, hey erm…my guild’s throwing a party tonight, would you like to come?”
“But I’m not in your guild.
“Doesn’t matter, as long as you’re with me, you’ll be fine.”
“In that case, I would be glad to accept your invitation.”
“Sweet, meet me at Healer Julia at around half-sunset.”

[meepkeep333]

moar! 10 char

[yazeed1429]

Lol I Laughed At The Party Where They Tortured Her I Thought Maybe They R.a.p.e.d Her xD

[meepkeep333]

bumb befor this turns to necro