The forgotten Werrior

[cloudrider023]

From are past of Fiesta we have lost are werriors but one we must trust are last one nobody know what he is called or how he looks but soon well see him in hes cluth of the heaven and earth We may meet him soon or later but if you never meet him in heaven plz pray to his life for Saving Are world from the cluthes of evil

[cloudrider023]

We may trust each other and love are life we have made But we must proctect the others

[grummin]

Translator pl0x?

[GigiBunny]

._. I am so lost *holding a map* I am not even sure this will help me

I cannot vote on this for I haven't got a clue .. I am trying to post but ...not sure why and Oo after looking at your profile confused even more :confused: soo that being said

*leaves*

[cloudrider023]

Why not trust in your soul and the other lives of others that you love why not love them then not trust the others that dont attack you and love the others that dont We trust others To the Warrior we may find are Unkow warriror soon But in the future well find him soon

[grummin]

I think this belongs in the "Werrior" section...maybe?

[cloudrider023]

Stop seying stupide things dude that just annoying

[GigiBunny]

omg!! I made Werrior ... Oo I mean Warrior on my fighter :D!! so excited about it Oo but anywho.... does this go with a story or just randomness??? :confused:

[grummin]

Stop seying stupide things dude that just annoying

I could not agree more. In fact, that was my first thought upon entering this thread.

[cloudrider023]

It is a story of are forgotten warrior that was found as are first one that helped us servive are first war

[grummin]

It is a story of are forgotten warrior that was found as are first one that helped us servive are first war

And this has what to do with Cleric Discussion?

EDIT: Fan Fiction goes here: http://www.outspark.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=175 not buried in Class Discussion, and under the wrong class no less.

[GigiBunny]

Stop seying stupide things dude that just annoying

Oo play nice lol you can ofc just ignore him or send him a pm..any flaming is not allowed on threads: forum rules


It is a story of are forgotten warrior that was found as are first one that helped us servive are first war

ohh :o i think I get it... Oo but not sure...sorry Dx

[cloudrider023]

You have to find out when you find it out youll be thanked For your support it is know as the first Gm Hint Hint!:cool:

[cloudrider023]

I am a story maker I am a poet i am a expart at making story i may make on of you friend or Pm me

[grummin]

I am a story maker I am a poet i am a expart at making story

Riiiiiiight...


i may make on of you friend or Pm me

Not in this lifetime.

[cloudrider023]

Dont start flames i dont like that Im A good poet and you can messege me If you want a story about you

[cloudrider023]

I have made my own of Soul of my soilder and Trust in the angles i have over 699 people that asked how i made it i said I made it with my heart and my soul

[grummin]

you can messege me If you want a story about you

Perhaps I wasn't clear the first time: NO.

[GigiBunny]

Oo oh this is like a place to have a story written about you? I missed that..sorry lol x.x

[cloudrider023]

I meant the First Gm

[cloudrider023]

Well im very good at story if you bring a Gm To Read my story or ask one if they want me to make them one Im about to make a claric one soon when someone asks

[grummin]

Well im very good at story

But at knowing where to post, not so much...

http://www.outspark.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=175

THAT is where the stories go- it's called the "Fan Fiction" section.

[cloudrider023]

I wise you peace in are real and other worlds around you Peace love harmony

[cloudrider023]

There well soon be a claric story Any claric may be In the story only two are accupted

[grummin]

There well soon be a claric story Any claric may be In the story only two are accupted

Will it be in Fan Fiction where it belongs, or will we have to get a CL to move it?

[novotny]

if i could understand one sentence of anything you say, i might make a good comment....its like i'm reading something written by someone who picked random words and threw it on a board.

[aperturelaboratories]

Are you a troll, or just an idiot? Either way...


http://www.threadbombing.com/data/media/30/YouFail.jpg

[Shadowic2]

Since I assume that this thread is meant for a story of some sort from what I've gathered so far, I'm going to move this to the Fan-Fiction section.

Please keep the flaming down and also try not to Multi-Post. If you have something you want to add to a previous post, use the Edit button. This may help you if you decide to develop a story within this thread.

[Orchids_Mantis]

From are past of Fiesta we have lost are werriors but one we must trust are last one nobody know what he is called or how he looks but soon well see him in hes cluth of the heaven and earth We may meet him soon or later but if you never meet him in heaven plz pray to his life for Saving Are world from the cluthes of evil

A few problems with this (if you want to have less harsh reactions to your writings here):

1) Periods. They help us know when one thought has ended and another began.
If you are avoiding tghem for poetic reasons (and most poems also use periods), use enter to break them up into lines. Your original story is very hard to read for lacking these (among other reasons)

2) "Are"
"Are" is a verb -one conjugate being "am". "Our", a word with similar pronunciation meaning a possessive of "us" or "we".

3) "cluthes of evil"
I think you either meant "Clutches of evil" (grasp) or "Clothes of evil" (to encompass in darkness as though dropping a sheet around it)...and if you meant to write "clothes" I'd go with "Shroud", it carries a more sinister effect

4) abbreviates:
Please avoid these.

5) contractions
if you use them, be sure to use an apostrophe, there is a big difference between "well" and "we'll".

[cloudrider023]

Its not really Radome you just dont like it when its not about you

[cloudrider023]

Your just not good at liying arent you atleast im the one that seying bad post

[forgottensoilder]

There is a problem for you peopld donot do anything bad to him :0 never do that :0

[nikmon]

hey cloudrider023, i dont understand a word you are typing and the stories/poems make no sense. If you want good comments then try to make your story a readable one.

This is an example of what your writing looks like: And th so werrier is on a forgoton in island fnd hopes a to nwe homm.

If you just translated it into correct context then people wouldnt have to play a guessing game when reading your work.

Here is a revised version of the example i made up: And so, the warrior is on the forgotten island in hopes to find a new home.

Notice how the revised sentence is much easier read. You dont need to take my advice, but please consider it.

[Orchids_Mantis]

Your just not good at liying arent you atleast im the one that seying bad post

If you are going to insult me in this thread and on my wall for pointing out errors with your writing and telling you how to improve it and make it understandable to your audience, then I will not sugar coat to make this pile of garbage which you laughably call a story sound less of a gargantuan failure than it is.


You made so many grammatic, spelling and punctuational errors in your first post alone it seems you are making an effort at a world record. Your poll alone shows that you have no clue what exactly you are writing, most people that voted probably have no idea what they are voting for.

Every post you make in this thread seems like you spit out something in another language then run it quickly through the world's worst translation site, assume it to be correct and post it. The fact that you are offended by people not understanding this landfill incinerator fodder is laughable; even more so is the fact that you insult people for not understanding.



Well im very good at story if you bring a Gm To Read my story or ask one if they want me to make them one Im about to make a claric one soon when someone asks

I would not subjigate Osama Bin Laden, let alone a hard-working GM, to this kind of visual assault and mental torment.


There, I stopped trying to make your horrendous failure sound like something that simply needs work and more like what it is: something you should stop doing. You butcher the art that is known as the written word to such a degree it should be considered inhumane to read it aloud to a deaf person. I am far from a professional writer, but my advice to you based on the disgusting dribble you have managed to group together into thoughts and transfer to others visually: Take up tap dancing, or a musical instrument, or even running...anything that has you not placing pen to parchment.

[grummin]

Take up tap dancing, or a musical instrument, or even running...anything that has you not placing pen to parchment.

I think (Not to mention hope) we've heard the last from our little illiterate storyteller. Check out this "comment to self" on its profile:

Comment by: ForgottenSoilder
I am Cloudrider023 i forgot my emaill 0.o

Apparently it can't remember its own email address any better than it can remember what it typed 10 seconds ago- fortunately for us.

[nikmon]

If you are going to insult me in this thread and on my wall for pointing out errors with your writing and telling you how to improve it and make it understandable to your audience, then I will not sugar coat to make this pile of garbage which you laughably call a story sound less of a gargantuan failure than it is.


You made so many grammatic, spelling and punctuational errors in your first post alone it seems you are making an effort at a world record. Your poll alone shows that you have no clue what exactly you are writing, most people that voted probably have no idea what they are voting for.

Every post you make in this thread seems like you spit out something in another language then run it quickly through the world's worst translation site, assume it to be correct and post it. The fact that you are offended by people not understanding this landfill incinerator fodder is laughable; even more so is the fact that you insult people for not understanding.




I would not subjigate Osama Bin Laden, let alone a hard-working GM, to this kind of visual assault and mental torment.


There, I stopped trying to make your horrendous failure sound like something that simply needs work and more like what it is: something you should stop doing. You butcher the art that is known as the written word to such a degree it should be considered inhumane to read it aloud to a deaf person. I am far from a professional writer, but my advice to you based on the disgusting dribble you have managed to group together into thoughts and transfer to others visually: Take up tap dancing, or a musical instrument, or even running...anything that has you not placing pen to parchment.

wow Orchid got a little angry right there! (and he should be) but i never saw you write anything like that before o.o possibly one of your greatest works to date! I praise your ability to transform anger into a beautiful work of art. What you just wrote happens to be the best peice of writing on this very thread!

[Orchids_Mantis]

wow Orchid got a little angry right there! (and he should be) but i never saw you write anything like that before o.o possibly one of your greatest works to date! I praise your ability to transform anger into a beautiful work of art. What you just wrote happens to be the best peice of writing on this very thread!

It was originally about twice as long, that post survived about 3 minutes before I edited it Dragonfly probably has the original post saved somewhere to blackmail me...no ToS violations, just a long train of metaphors involving -among other things- cows, fecal matter, payment not to write any more stories, more landfills and the Geneva convention...but I felt that was a bit overboard for only 2 insults.

[Dragonfly77]

It was originally about twice as long, that post survived about 3 minutes before I edited it Dragonfly probably has the original post saved somewhere to blackmail me...no ToS violations, just a long train of metaphors involving -among other things- cows, fecal matter, payment not to write any more stories, more landfills and the Geneva convention...but I felt that was a bit overboard for only 2 insults.

Come now. Do you think I'm that treacherous?

[GigiBunny]

o.o I have comments on my page from the OP as well... I think I answered but tbh, Oo I don't really remember as I get quite a few comments on my page: the bad and the good :o

@ OP: if you are going to write a story: post it and granting us...hints? :confused: or ideas about it is fine. It is always good to have ideas and if you have written the story, then let us read it. :o